Messed up Recount - Fix Up | Paragraph Linking

L.I: To correct certain structure and language features in a recount.
This week for writing we looked at paragraph linking in a recount to correct a messed up one that we read. First we had a lesson where we discussed and talked about paragraph structure in a recount and paragraph linking. The recount was titled as "Walking up Mount Fuji" written by our teacher. Then we went away and fixed up recount so that the paragraphs linked up and made sense. We also had to highlight the changes we made so that they were easily visible. To link paragraphs you need to make sure the last sentence relates to the next paragraph.

Sky Tower Recount | Mock Test

L.I: To quickly write a recount using the correct structure and language.
This week for writing we re-created what the writing test coming up is going to be like so that we aren't as pressured in the real one and are used to what it's like. We had to write the recount about the Sky Tower trip that most of us went to, and the others who didn't had to write about something they did in the holidays or at any other time. We first re-capped what we did at the sky tower and the main events so we had an idea on what to write about. Then we went away and had 40 minutes to write the recount. Later on in the week, we went back and looked at the recounts and rated them using a writing Rubic. Then we commented on our writing on the two starting paragraphs on we we should have corrected. My recount is shown above.

Little Boat Recount Commenting

L.I: Identify the features of  recount.
This week for writing we looked back on our imaginative recount that we made last week - The Little Boat. We had to look at our recount and try to find 3 Time connectives, 3 First persons, and 3 past tense verbs. Time connectives are like - When, After,Then, Later, Before, First, and etc. First person words are like - Me, I, Myself, She etc. Past tense verbs are like - Soaked, Imagined, Ate, Appeared, Thought, and etc. If we found anyone of these things then we had to highlight it and comment what it was. You can see mine and my comments In my recount for the Time connectives I was able to find these 3 words - Next, then, after. For first person I found these 3 words - She, They and I. For past tense verbs I found  these three words - Appeared, Began, and soaked.