Sky Tower Recount | Mock Test

L.I: To quickly write a recount using the correct structure and language.
This week for writing we re-created what the writing test coming up is going to be like so that we aren't as pressured in the real one and are used to what it's like. We had to write the recount about the Sky Tower trip that most of us went to, and the others who didn't had to write about something they did in the holidays or at any other time. We first re-capped what we did at the sky tower and the main events so we had an idea on what to write about. Then we went away and had 40 minutes to write the recount. Later on in the week, we went back and looked at the recounts and rated them using a writing Rubic. Then we commented on our writing on the two starting paragraphs on we we should have corrected. My recount is shown above.